Recent content by JazzyChick

I loved Collateral, though when you first mentioned it, it took me a few seconds to remember what it was. Its been a long time since I've seen it too. Anyway, I am very intrigued by this story (I already have some theories as to how everything in this chapter could relate to the plot of the...

well, here's chapter five. my mom proofread it, and well...she is much more gramatically oriented than me but she is a math teacher, so please forgive any mistakes.... anyway, school is canceled AGAIN tomorrow AND more snow ice stuff is supposed to fall today and this weekend. my power went...

okay, its a great start but it could be at a minimum 3x as long, probably 5. if feels like you're giving a list of actions and dialogue rather than telling a story. flesh it out, give it some body. (my minimum chapter length is 2,000 words) just a couple other things: "Dialogue shouldn't be...

So sorry for the long delay, however the fifth chapter is written, just not edited. Unfortunately, I have been locked in my house for 5 DAYS!!!! and can't get it to TTG to edit. I think I'll just have my mom do it, so it will be up either tonight or tomorrow. Hey, Oklahoma is officially in a...

great new chapter, and sry about the delayed response. hmm...the comish and jazz having a chat. that's nice. espically when coupled with terry's murder investigation. murder is always nice too :p . can't wait for more! (maybe some q's will be answered...) -JazzyC

I liked the stoyr a lot, and I am definately third-ing what has been said. So please, keep that in mind when I make a few suggestions (feel free to ignore them if you don't like them. they are only suggestoins) "She felt nothing else as she hovered above the large cluster of lights, glowing...

yay for snow days and chapters posted! (or rather, all the teachers telling us to go home early...) really liked the chapter Matt H. I've been waiting for you to post it FOREVER so that we're not the only ones who knows that Robin is a few eggs short of a dozen (has a screw loose, the lights...

Thanks you guys! SilentBat: Don't worry, you're going to get into Grace's head here pretty soon. I'm just trying to let you figure things out about her as Batman does...that way the original character doesn't compleatly overpower the story. Believe it or not, the story is not primarily about...

double post :evil: again... anywho, here's chapter four...I couldn't think of a quote so if any of ya'll have suggestions for one, I'm compleatly open to them. Ch. 4 To: [email protected] From: [email protected] Subject: Re: Visitors Don’t get caught up in the cycle again...

good job! i like both chapters, and let me just say that every one you write is better than the one before. you're showing amazing improvement and your story is developing nicely. no complaints. -JazzyC P.S. horray for snow days! :D

thanks SO much Midnightassasin! :anime: :D :anime: in case everyone else in confused...MidnightA is my amazing art friend. she has been kind enough to draw Grace for me. here's the link. I hope ya'll enjoy! GRACE'S PIC -JazzyC P.S. ummm...instead of writing over the break i ate turkey...

fine Matt H, take the credit. actually you deserve a lot for how this story is turning out. ;) :D anyway, i'm so glad the you guys commented on both Barbara's little incident with the cell phone and the fact the Bruce left Grace on the side of the road. the thing with Bruce will be dealt with...

i'm definately into this story too. you're tense/grammer and such has gotten a lot better the more you've written. its awesome how fast you're improving! and i love what you've done with Jazz... 1. she's not perfect in any sense of the word. (an original character that actually has flaws...

*cringes at the doubld post* well...its here. The long awaited Chatper 3!!!!! YAY!!! *notices she is the only one cheering* oh...:sweat: Matt A: thank you so much! your positive remarks really make me feel good 'bout my writing. SilentBat: thanks! you're awesome and i'm so glad that...

just finished reading the story and its really good, espically for a first timer :anime: . I do have to agree with the king though, tenses got jumbled a bit, but don't worry. First person is increadibly hard to write (i think) and its only going to get better the more you practice. Good Job...